Play Writing: Fallen Angel

So I have been writng this play for a few months and now I think I am going to start sending it off to contests and publishers. I would like some feedback on the play because I am nervous about sending this off. This play is very personal to me and I want to do it justice. This is just Act 1 I am re-rewriting Act 2 as it felt off. It will be up soon. Feedback is love. 
(Oh and some names were borrowed from my fav fandom but others are  based on real people I know)

 

( Act 1 )